There’s potential in this story for something larger and entertaining. Though, from this single “journal entry” there’s only a hint at what the author has in mind for the world she’s trying to build. From that hint, I’d like to see what comes from it.
On this story alone there wasn’t too much to work with. It’s in need of a proofreading to catch a handful of errors and incomplete sentences, though at the same time, if worked into the story better, it could show as a characteristic of the education the narrator doesn’t have in this world of the future.
I also felt that this “journal entry” was incomplete. It starts out sounding like there’ll be a bit of story to it, then goes on to explain the world Rune lives in and how it came to be, but then it just stops. This might have been aided if there were a few entries in this one story/ebook, but it stands on its own.
As I said, I feel there’s much more to work with here and it’ll just take time for the author to flesh it out in future works, that I will be interested in reading. On its own, it didn’t work too well in my opinion. Still an ok quick read to get yourself interested in the author’s plans.
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